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Reflect How Soon You’ll Quit this Stage

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It’s a bitch, waking up dead. Bright lights burn the last breath of life on the pathways of the brain. The images replay along the sides of a tunnel, the Great Wormhole from There to Here.

From Life to Something Else.

I can still see him. Standing there. Casual. Killing me.

Light erupted from the end of the gun and enveloped me. No matter where the bullet hits, that living light of Death, it penetrates the soul through the eyes.

Just so you know. It’s best to be prepared for the inevitable.

I wasn’t.

That’s why I’m Here.

I can’t quite see, but I can feel her. She died Here, within these four walls. Tubercular, she was.

My Wife.

I slide my feet along the rough planks, my hands outstretched, atingle at the prospect of her touch. Take me, I whisper. Take me now. Don’t make me go back There. I can’t do it. Not again. Not even for you. 

Her breath stirred my matted hair and blew Life into my eyes. She flung a kiss from her fine fingers and merged with stained wallpaper and flecks of paint. Her voice lingered long enough to insist.

You found me once. Remember? I’m not Here. I’m There. 

…….TO BE CONTINUED…….

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  1. Wow. Nice. Interesting, too – you know how to grab the attention. :)

    October 28, 2013
    • I’m still not happy with it, A.D., but I like to use the blog to work out ideas that might become something. I haven’t done much fiction here of late, but this character insisted. He’s a bully that way.

      October 28, 2013
      • Now there’s a winner. If he insists then he has something to say. Every pushy character I’ve ever bumped into (and there’s been a few) has led me to good things.

        Good luck with it! :)

        October 28, 2013
      • I think blogs are a great way to work out story ideas! I like to do that, too. It helps me decide if I want to turn short pieces into longer stories. You’re off to a great start, and your opening is awesome. Interested to see what comes next!

        October 28, 2013
  2. This takes one in a stranglehold ..

    October 28, 2013
    • After the weekend I had, I am in a creepy mood. I wish I could haunt a few people. Ha. Thanks, Col, for your ever-supportive comments.

      October 28, 2013
  3. creepy and well written – want to see what’s next

    October 28, 2013
    • I wish I could make them end up in IKEA, because a good horror story needs to be set there.

      October 28, 2013
      • so, so true!

        October 28, 2013
  4. I can’t wait to see how they reunite in death!!

    October 28, 2013
    • I’m not sure they’ll be that cooperative, Jessie. We’ll see.

      October 28, 2013
  5. Beetlejuice, Bettlejuice, Beetlejuice.

    http://www.imdb.com/title/tt0094721/

    October 28, 2013
    • Maybe that’s my problem with these people, Lou. Somewhere along the way, I uttered the wrong words three times, and now they haunt me.

      October 28, 2013
  6. Thank you! You know I like this.

    October 28, 2013
    • It’s better than the endless litany of ‘me me me’ that I’ve been doing of late. At least, that’s what some people would say. I guess it’s really bad when I’m taking pictures yesterday, and somebody quipped, “Is this going to be on the blog tomorrow?” I mean, dang. I must be really self-consumed.

      October 28, 2013
      • I have been getting that quite bit lately when I am out with my camera. Of course if I have the camera in hand I am probably doing something blog related but still.

        October 28, 2013
      • You are being too hard on yourself again! I just simply love your stories. And why would you take a picture if you weren’t going to do something with it? Or at least consider doing something with it.

        Hey, at least you are taking tons of “selfies” in stupid poses.

        Guess it is up to me to take pictures of you in stupid poses. With your mouth open. Eating. :-P

        October 28, 2013
  7. Love it!

    October 28, 2013
    • Thank you, Lisa.

      I loved your story in Invasion. I never expected that twist at the end. My review is coming.

      October 28, 2013
      • Thanks Andra. The twist is my favorite part because its so freakin’ possible and terrifying. ;)

        October 28, 2013
  8. Hmmmmmm, intrigued!

    October 28, 2013
    • I’ll try not to leave you hanging……..

      October 28, 2013
      • Yay! I can only be left hanging in so many Andra stories at once! :)

        October 28, 2013
  9. Simply perfect.

    October 28, 2013
    • Re-reading it this morning, I’d do a few things differently, but this was what the characters wanted. They really are determined to be together, I guess.

      October 28, 2013
  10. Oooo!!! Spine tingling!!

    October 28, 2013
  11. *claps* Great story..can’t wait for the continuation!! :D

    October 28, 2013
  12. tarakianwarrior #

    :)

    October 28, 2013
  13. Anticipation is a wonderful thing.

    October 28, 2013
  14. I want more!

    October 28, 2013
    • Coming tomorrow. And the next day. And the day after that. :)

      October 28, 2013
  15. Very nice!

    October 28, 2013
    • Thank you.

      As an aside, our husbands definitely need to meet someday. From your comment over the weekend, it sounds like they would get along well. :)

      October 28, 2013
  16. I like the last lines. “I’m not Here. I’m There.” Makes me wonder where Here and There is though I have my own ideas.

    October 28, 2013
  17. Intriguing start.

    I have a spooky tale to post on Wednesday ~ it also involves feet sliding along rough planks, arms outstretched. :shock:

    October 28, 2013
  18. I like the image of the light burning the life out of the brain.

    October 28, 2013
  19. Wow, this writing is stunning, Andra. Can’t wait to see where this leads!

    Hugs from Ecuador,
    Kathy

    October 28, 2013
  20. Is fascinating an emotion or just a word. Hummm maybe both.

    October 28, 2013
  21. Eerie! Perfect for halloween…

    October 28, 2013
  22. That opening paragraph, the first 40 or so words really set up the confrontational emotions throughout.

    I loved this.

    Happy Halloween A

    October 29, 2013
  23. This is just a fabulous opening, Andra. Simply outstanding!

    October 30, 2013
  24. Your first sentence, first paragraph, in fact, are real attention grabbers, Andra. Just catching up this afternoon and looking forward to where this takes you.

    October 30, 2013
  25. Kir Piccini #

    I was spooked and that last line was perfection in every form. “I’m not here. I’m there.” Wow.

    October 31, 2013
  26. I have chills!

    October 31, 2013

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